Saturday, January 9, 2010

Trembling

 

hugs herself, running
looks behind her, he's gaining!
up ahead, a cop!

(submitted at Haiku Bones)

11 comments:

  1. Wow, yer right, hugging is exactly what you might do when trembling with fear. A perfect hard-boiled micro-poem. Kinda reminds me of an Uma Thurman scene out of Pulp Fiction, right?

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  2. Makes me think of those gritty British detective thrillers on TV. Super convincing 'ku -- thanks Gia.

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  3. running and trembling. this haiku makes my heart pound!

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  4. Chilling. A mini-novel, this is full of energy and vivid imagery!

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  5. Very very nice. Love your imagery. Well done.



    Melanie

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  6. You can run, but you can't hide.

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  7. Trembling in terror but safety in sight - nicely written.

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  8. Very very cool. I like it lots! Thanks Gia!

    Aulice

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  9. So scary. Definitely a trembling experience.

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  10. action haiku, I would this, though I chuckle at the first line, it still produce quite a visual

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  11. You sure got a whole fascinating story packed into three lines...wow!

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